Comments from wordytom
|2008-09-17 22:42:06||Your story is fair at best. For onbe thing the religious crap does not work the way you have presented it. It is distracting to the story as a whole. You stated this is the best you have ever written. This means either you forgot a cardinal of writing - The reader cannot know what you mean, only what you tell in the story. Or, you are not as good as you believe you are. I think you have the makings of a good writer.|
|2008-09-19 17:12:25||I'm old fashioned, I prefer consent and cooperation.|
|2008-09-21 20:53:15||Drinking With My Sister||I gave it a negative rating because you do not know what you are writing about. You have a good imagination, but you need more to write a good story. You have a big ego that will prevent you from developing a big talent unless you tame it.
I am hard on you here because I feel you might become a proficient writere is you first learn to write. You have promise.
|2008-09-28 11:23:53||I Love Dogs||It made me wish I was a dog!|
|2008-10-04 15:50:37||~Papas||I reluctantly gave you a positive rating for imagination. I suggest you learn more about the human body before you try to write about it.
However, keep writing. that is the only way I know to improve.