Comments from deohyouge
|2012-06-19 17:38:48||GIRL WHO CAME BACK||Very nice short story. Tugs at the heartstrings as well as ones waterworks. With the unusual emotional button-pushing used within, opposed to the typical erotic fare too often aiming for erection over emotion. I was rather looking forward to a unique story to continue along the same way. Instead we are soon following the well worn path that is the erotica here. Please take no offense, I am only suggesting a less traveled track better suited to your talents. I was looking for a ghost/spirit angle providing the guidance to your character. His internal conflicts being "is she real, imagined, phantom?" with the character coming to grips with the false guilt and moving forward to date AND visits, real, imagined or supernatural to continue.