Comments from Pavilon
|2009-02-18 00:31:29||My downward spiral to a becoming a slut Chapter 13 Â– Growing closer to Liz||Tragic tale, Talented writer. This would be perfect fairy tale ending at this point.
I have read all your submissions thus far. I thank you for sharing your gift.
|2009-02-18 11:01:53||Meeting Mistress||I enjoyed your twist of female/female rather than the more historical male/female of the era.
I commend you on your effort. It is not easy for a male to write in first person as a female, much less submissive. Perhaps I have a bais to your declared gender, but I thought I felt masculine tones in your writting that I could identify with as being male myself. The major at times seemed to look at the french tart as if she had a man's eye. Perhaps if the language were a little softer the male tones would melt away. Regardless I doubt that I could have done as well and I deeply thank you for giving me so much entertainment, because I am still thinking about it.
I think you have made a good stab at it and I would not call it to tame. The 1940s were a much differant time from now and this story would have been totally shocking.
|2009-03-11 02:50:17||My downward spiral to a becoming a slut Chapter 17 Â– ElizabethÂ’s assault||No need to stop, let it take its course. I said it before, "You are talented."