Comments from lesley_tara
|2009-07-29 21:29:39||Hitching a Ride to Murder||A really good story - your dialogue rings true, which is so important in a story. The hook at the end is really good (& hints at a sequel?). Some more detail and description of the murder would be good - that part is rather brief.|
|2009-09-02 19:58:06||Alumni: Kim's Revenge||A great read, you certainly got me going! - thanx. The interaction between Lisa and Kim is really well done, so natural and believable (I loved their nicknames for each other - a great touch). The sex is very well described, with lovely use of language, especially in bits like the sentence describing Lisa feeling Kim's oral attentions as "Soothing, arousing, healing, pampering, all wrapped up into one fantastic feel." The final scene with Dee catching them and joining in adds an extra dimension to an already HOT tale. I've only read this chapter because it came up in the 'lesbian' list - please write some more girl/girl scenes, you've got real talent and style.|
|2009-09-02 20:10:21||Emily Quietly Slips Into Your Room ...||Great story - lovely, sexy, and damn hot!! Describing things in this first person and present tense way makes it so immediate, it feels like such a real scene and the reader is living through it too - I can imagine it's me, and it's making me just about come. Hope you got more where this came from, babe.|
|2009-11-09 19:54:28||A woman named Freddie||A lovely story - really convincing in the emotions and the dialogue, had me completely believing in it. Larry (several comments further down) is right about one thing - it certainly turned this (lesbian) woman on!!
Are you going to follow up with their next encounter?
|2009-11-12 20:42:45||Sneaking Into The Locker Room||This is lovely, and so effective and immediate in the way you describe it. I could feel that it was happenning to me - it got me really hot and wet, thanks!!|