Comments from del fuego
|2009-09-06 23:46:26||The First Night in the Cabin||LOVED THE INTRO.
You called it.
|2009-09-06 23:52:52||bonding with daddy||VINCE, DRASTIC IMPROVEMENT IN YOUR WRITING.
Very good and erotic. keep up the good work.
|2009-09-07 00:02:02||me and jess||Excellent for a first try. 7/10
keep going, develop the characters as people and their feelings for each other. Just because its incest doesn't mean it should short circuit the normal man/woman love and desire. Flesh out the story, add detail,
eagerly waiting for chapter 2