Comments from Ed Itor

Date Story title Comment
2014-05-15 19:19:51 Boy in the grass 57 This story is progressing very nicely and the bike will be a great stealth vehicle for Max's stalking of their victims. I picture the helmet with the skull's face painted on the dark faceplate in the see through stencils they use now a days.
I am looking forward to Rick's reaction to June/May's revelation and the fact that Max is taking up space already being a High school grad. Yes I know he is learning interaction and better communication skills but it will still be interesting as it dawns on the other parents. It should also be fun to see the other parents' involvements, because none are stupid people.
I think Max doing Thomas that way let Wu off too easy, hopefully more is planned for him and his brother.
Also can't wait to find what the butterflies/dragonflies can do and it will be great when Rick gets his as that will confirm his place in the family.
Keep up the good work and now the long wait begins for the next chapter ... again.
2014-05-18 18:33:32 Boy in the grass 58 Also considering what had happened to others, in Jazz's view maybe Tali could have died. Remember Tali is her twin and might not be as adroit as Jazz in charming people or even might rub some the wrong way.
A Good chapter and it allowed us a view into the 4 Mousketeers personalities and how & why they have become an extended part of this family. It also lets us know a bit about their family values too.

The interesting part of how this raid works out now begins and what happens to the children, the family, their friends and the authorities starts.

As for The Wedding, that would be The Happy Ending that Max deserves to have this finish on.