Comments from DarethMortuus

Date Story title Comment
2010-05-25 17:14:13 Raped virgin bride You need more line breaks and such. I'll actually read the story then.
2010-06-01 08:58:21 The Slavery Series: Chapter 1 Very nice. I can't wait to see these little bitches punished some more *evil grin*
Not badly written either :)
2010-06-01 09:16:47 Neice on a Leash Not bad, alot of gramatical errors and incorrect words used. But a good story :)
2010-06-01 09:39:05 Reading Allowed, Pt.1 Absolutely amazing. Has definitely inspired me for a story now. Just great :D
2010-07-05 21:07:48 Taking One For The Team 2: On Tour You need to work on keeping the separation. Your work is all bunch up in some places, makes it hard to read.
Better to have too much spacing than not enough :)