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Date Story title Comment
2011-10-02 04:50:32 One Special Day. CAW-8 This is not bad, but it feels too brief and the style is somewhat jittery and fragmented.
2011-10-02 05:01:56 Mom's Second Husband The frame story of an anecdote amongst a group of friends is a classic device to provide context, and it's put to good use here. The body of the story exercises a dynamic but minimalist style which is engaging. I'm not sure I like the ending though, as it feels heavy-handed.
2011-10-02 06:20:29 Hardcore Porno: a Now That's Fucking Hardcore! story This has a polished quality, and the prose is very measured and controlled. There's genuine tension leading up to the scene, and the narrative voice feels natural and engaging. The plot's a little formulaic, but that's not always such a bad thing, since formulas became formula because they were good to begin with.
2011-10-25 02:42:57 The Company of Wolves. I'm not much of an Agatha Christie fan, although I did read "And Then There Were None" many years ago and liked it. A story I'm working on now is something of a murder mystery, and although it's informed more by "The Phantom of the Opera" maybe I should read a little Christie as a reference. Thanks for the comments, it makes all the work worthwhile.
2011-10-25 05:12:26 In the Blink of an Eye This is not bad, but sloppy. Grammar, spelling, and syntax are pretty rundown, and it inhibits the story. Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.
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