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Comments from Wounded Wolf

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Date Story title Comment
2010-04-17 02:01:48 Jans mum found out - I was in trouble - I thought. The story line has real potential but the actual writing is very choppy and annoying. Using "she said" and "I said" time after time is very distracting. There are specific rules/guidelines for presenting dialogue in text. I'm sure they should be easy to hunt down on the internet and incorporate into your writing. Overall, I enjoyed the premise. Keep writing.
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