Comments from WantSumCandyLittleGirl
|2010-05-23 19:14:22||Excellent story, well written. Keep them coming|
|2010-05-23 19:18:36||Excellent story, well written. Keep them coming|
|2010-05-23 23:07:56||My Daughter Loves Her Daddy||Is it Kelli or Katie? What about separating the paragraphs? What about adding punctuation? And since when do girls getting laid for the first time say "OMG" and not "Oh my God"?
The story had it's ups and downs and needed a bit of work to make it more enjoyable to read.
|2010-05-23 23:46:57||LONG WINTER WEEKEND WITH THE GIRLS Part 1||Well written, although once Dolores referred to her Daddy? Good story, good plot, well laid out. Any chance of part 2?|
|2010-06-01 18:17:58||to tell you the truth.||Dude, not only is your grammar horribly bad, but the plot sucks worse than BP's attempt to plug the oil leak in the Gulf of Mexico. Learn to write and come back when you do.|