Comments from DoodleHead

Date Story title Comment
2010-06-25 10:21:41 Reality Jump - Chapter 1 Don't worry, last time I counted the next chapter is over 3 pages. And it has a good sex scene!
2010-07-04 13:01:24 Reality Jump - Chapter 3 It all get's explained/fixed in Chapter 4, call it a plot device that has been used time and time again to get readers wanting the next part.

And I completely agree that handing a loaded gun to someone like that is wrong in every aspect, but again, plot device.
2010-06-29 22:31:28 Repair Me Wall of text = Bad!!!!!
Try to hit the enter button a couple of times after a paragraph, it helps readers to be able to follow along with the story much better.