Comments from BigDoug35

Date Story title Comment
2011-02-07 12:11:11 Taken Your structure is sloppy. You need some paragraphs and more story flow.
2011-02-07 12:19:54 The rape of my sister-in-law Good dialogue and action.
2011-02-11 21:38:36 Food court Nice twist ending. M. Night would be proud.
2011-02-12 11:16:30 Punctuation is your friend.
2011-02-12 11:19:43 More sex detail, but a pretty good story.