Comments from droopysdad
|2011-09-26 20:58:32||The Limo Driver||I absolutely agree with Anonymous Reader. Please, please, please stop with the "..." before every paragraph. It is both unnecessary and severely detracts from the good effort you put into your otherwise excellent writing.|
|2011-09-26 21:10:42||The Limo Driver||I do understand the function of an ellipsis. To quote Wikipedia, " When placed at the beginning or end of a sentence, the ellipsis can also inspire a feeling of melancholy longing. The ellipsis calls for a slight pause in speech or any other form of text."
Putting it at the beginning of every paragraph is similar to putting an exclamation point at the end of every sentence. A period, and often a comma, also indicates a slight pause in speech to prevent sentences or paragraphs from running on and on...
Please understand, I am not criticizing the quality of your writing. I do like what you write very much. I just believe an ellipsis at the beginning of every paragraph detracts from your overall presentation.
|2012-11-30 13:08:30||sister's dress up doll||There are these keys on your keyboard, usually labeled "Shift" that capitalize characters. With these, the story would become much easier to read. Blank lines between the paragraphs would also help.
The story was a very good start. I am looking forward to your future work.
|2013-12-03 21:37:15||The Girl In the Pink Hoodie||Tags would have helped, but it was a well written story nonetheless. Nice development, moved well...|
|2014-03-09 02:18:37||A Trip to the GYN||Please write a part 2.|