Comments from PCV
|2011-05-19 16:34:37||An IN/Sight Exclusive Report: -- Island Royale: Institutional White Slavery in the New Millennium||Thank you very much! You have made the first comment to my story.
This is my first posting to the website, and so of course legitimate constructive criticism would be appreciated. I’ve already started sketching out the outline for another story – not a sequel, though – but frankly I would prefer to receive some reader feedback before deciding whether it would be worth investing much more time or effort into the new project.
Judging from other stories I have read on this website, especially those in the “institutional sex slavery” genre such as “Ladies at Sea” and “Payne Academy” to name but two, my submission is admittedly rather tame. There are a few “hardcore” passages, hopefully descriptively written of course, but my novella is far from “extreme,” as this website defines the term.
In writing Island Royale, I had wanted to do something more than simply produce an erotic tale, however. My larger goal was to write a serious, thought-provoking piece of literature that would
|2011-05-19 16:37:06||An IN/Sight Exclusive Report: -- Island Royale: Institutional White Slavery in the New Millennium||(Again, the website administrator limits how much one can write)
seek to explore the balance between human instinctive behavioral predisposition and the influence of social customs and mores all people are taught to be appropriate expressions of “civilized” human behavior. As an aside, I had also sought to address some of the more obvious logistical difficulties involved in establishing and maintaining a secret organization premised upon the sexual exploitation of women in this modern age of international travel, the Internet, global positioning satellites and instant telecommunications – problems, frankly, that never seem to be adequately addressed in these website stories but yet must be satisfactorily resolved unless the reader is to be expected to wholly abandon all physical and political realities. In short, I wanted to write a plausible erotic story with – dare I say it? – “socially redeeming values,” to borrow the famous US Supreme Court language.
Two further notes regar
|2011-05-19 16:38:11||An IN/Sight Exclusive Report: -- Island Royale: Institutional White Slavery in the New Millennium||regarding presentation: Authors have little, if any, control over the format the website administrator chooses to use when posting submissions. Although my transmission of the story had largely employed a “Times New Roman” 12-point font with justified margins, I had for effect used other fonts where appropriate, as well as italics and bold-face, and at times have included indented parenthetical passages as well as four footnotes. Having seen my submission posted, though, I see that the website administrator has not honored these typographical preferences. Furthermore, I had tried my best to avoid the sort of spelling, punctuation and grammatical errors that I find so annoyingly common in these website stories, but see now that an occasional possessive apostrophe has been “converted” into a question mark, my footnotes have been placed within the text instead of at the bottom of the page (undoubtedly leading to some confusion) and many of my graphics have become a seemingly random se|
|2011-05-19 16:39:40||An IN/Sight Exclusive Report: -- Island Royale: Institutional White Slavery in the New Millennium||seemingly random series of numbers, letters and characters. Oh well.
Please enjoy Island Royale.