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2013-02-07 01:03:08 Singing Jasen's Song: Part 4 Just a typo. Obviously I meant Jasen; though I have absolutely no idea where I would have pulled the name Josh from. Sorry for the overlook.
2013-02-07 01:15:23 In Riley's Arms: Part 1 Yes, what's below is exactly correct. The friend is only joking about her age when he calls her 9. In the very next line, he's corrected when Jon says she's 12. It's a bit subtle.
2013-02-07 01:22:44 Singing Jasen's Song: Part 1 I do appreciate any criticism possible, though I have addressed your points already below in the comments. I know the perspective changed, which I played with, but I'm still no aware of having changed person at all. If anyone could offer examples, I would honestly love to correct them.

This was a bit of an experiment for me in writing in third person. The whole purpose was because of how I wanted to describe the dance scene. Third person is not my thing, and I'm much less practiced at it, so I fully acknowledge the awkward lack of flow. I dig way too much into the character's mind, so with this I ended up trying to dig into two characters at once with undesired results.

Notg everything goes as planned.

Thanks for reading.
2013-07-11 00:49:27 In Riley's Arms: Part 1 Anonymous reader
2013-06-15 23:36:45
I very VERY much appreciate you making me aware of this. The user has been reported and her profile was promptly taken down by the site moderators.

The best part was she actually put a copyright warning on In Riley's Arms... gave me a good (rage filled) chuckle.

Anyway, I take it as a compliment. Apparently she thought my stories worth stealing. =D Thank you thank you thank you again for bringing this to my attention!
(the real)SS
2014-12-14 06:45:47 Seeing Matt's Stars: Part 4 I'm soo sorry that I disappeared! A bunch of life stuff came up that kept me away from writing, but I'm going to be getting back to it. I promise!
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