Comments from PureSnow
|2011-08-28 08:14:57||Gothic Amy And Me Part 7 Fitting In, In college||Hey could u add in 2 more girls please? Grace: 5'1, dark brunette, light mixed race, dark brown eyes, ear-length hair, shy little sub, bi, bondage fetish. And Snow 5'1, pure white hair just below ear-length, silver eyes, white, Shy, Grace's girlfriend, cum fetish, bi. thx ;)|
|2011-08-28 08:34:19||Gothic Amy And Me Part 7 Fitting In, In college||Hey sorry i forgot to include character ages, their both in late 15, snow doesn't know her birthday so she just goes by the end of the year and grace is mid january|
|2011-09-02 19:53:48||I agree don't include the adults, also avoid pregnancy as it can kill a good series. you should check out a t.v show called: a town called eureka. pretty much your described town, it might help you visualise it better. quite good for a first story, you could have him make his sister do some really fetish sex stuff tryna see how it works, like dogs or peeing, whatever your fetishes are. one last thing, could you make her talk a bit more while they're doing stuff, makes her seem lesd of a drone and more her will being bent to his.
|2011-09-02 21:30:49||Sorry that last post was by me, i got logged out.|
|2011-09-03 22:27:49||Gothic Amy and Me Part 8...When a Door closes a window opens...||i think you should put in some bondage, peeing , animal sex, something really fetishy to spice things up and grab peoples attention.
As always, positive rating, would have liked to have seen more with lilith but i guess that can wait =D