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Date Story title Comment
2013-09-27 00:34:37 Chapter II -- Mark Structure... you lost structure with your dialogue... Other than that I have no issue with your formatting... Oh sorry forgot to tell you I was trying to give you a critique... shit to work on the next time round... you understand.
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