Comments from darthel0101
|2012-07-11 11:45:34||Swinging in the Neighborhood Chapter 28 The Daughter War Begins||The only thing that I dislike about your chapters is the way that you end them on a cliff. I would much rather see the chapters begin with something beginning to happen than begin with something having already happened.|
|2012-07-16 03:41:23||The Librarian and the Bartender||WONDERFUL story; GREAT character development.
More; please write more.
|2014-05-15 11:58:36||Boy in the grass 57||You would think that the person giving negative votes would realize that too many other people are willing to give this story positives.
This was definitely a good feel-good chapter and I like the motorcycle concept. I also like the way that Max kept his promise to Carol. The only problem is that it creates a permanent drain on medical/support resources.
|2014-08-11 16:22:41||If you win? - part 1||The original version has apparently been removed - possibly due to age restrictions.|
|2012-07-25 13:34:39||Swinging in the Neighborhood Chapter 29 Daddies Revenge||This story is what it is - with, or without any element. The power of your story would have been cheapened by the inclusion of diluting elements. I am only sorry to hear you state that you are nearing the end of your story. I hope to see more of your writing in the future.|