Comments from darthel0101

Date Story title Comment
2012-07-11 11:45:34 Swinging in the Neighborhood Chapter 28 The Daughter War Begins The only thing that I dislike about your chapters is the way that you end them on a cliff. I would much rather see the chapters begin with something beginning to happen than begin with something having already happened.
2012-07-16 03:41:23 The Librarian and the Bartender WONDERFUL story; GREAT character development.
More; please write more.
2014-05-15 11:58:36 Boy in the grass 57 You would think that the person giving negative votes would realize that too many other people are willing to give this story positives.

This was definitely a good feel-good chapter and I like the motorcycle concept. I also like the way that Max kept his promise to Carol. The only problem is that it creates a permanent drain on medical/support resources.
2014-08-11 16:22:41 If you win? - part 1 The original version has apparently been removed - possibly due to age restrictions.
2012-07-25 13:34:39 Swinging in the Neighborhood Chapter 29 Daddies Revenge This story is what it is - with, or without any element. The power of your story would have been cheapened by the inclusion of diluting elements. I am only sorry to hear you state that you are nearing the end of your story. I hope to see more of your writing in the future.