Comments from MarqWinks
|2012-08-24 15:54:31||Together with Angela||Most excellent. I'm heading for part 2 now as soon as I take care of the bulge in my pants. Keep up the good work. Thanks|
|2012-09-01 16:23:39||Part 2, I want to be just like mom||I liked it and you did turn me on. Please keep going. You are getting better and your story is interesting. Thanks|
|2012-09-01 16:53:01||Part 5, my sexual life slowly begins||You're getting better and I'm getting more excited. Keep up the good work. Thanks :)|
|2012-09-02 12:41:53||My Birthday Vacation - A New Cummer (Part 3)||Great story, please keep it going.
You asked for feedback and suggestions. Here are a couple of things to be aware of and this goes for so many up and coming writers on here and other sites.
'your' is always used before a noun possessive form of you, relating to or belonging to you
'you're' is a contraction of you are
'were' is past 2d singular, past plural, or past subjunctive of be
'we're' is: a contraction of we are
As you can see there's a big difference and for those who know, it's sort of like a screech of chalk on a blackboard every time one sees a misuse of the above.
|2012-12-26 19:44:29||Jessinta 01A - The Beginning (reworked)||I'm heading for 1b. I like it so far. Interesting, but in need of a bit of editing.|