Comments from prairiecat666
|2012-06-14 16:21:56||Mind Control Family||AUTHOR: HAHAHA I figured the two things people were going to criticize me for was the grammar, and switching from first person two third.
I will admit I was lazy and in the interest of time I didn't go through it as well as I should have. I did this off the top of my head, next chapter I'll actually come up with a outline before I wright it. Its it's just to bad I can't edit my work on here.
Thanks for your suggestions and praise everyone.