Comments from bav86
|2012-07-12 16:27:06||Getting the Cheerleader||Hey Kristinarox,
I liked your story. It was quite sexy.
A few notes:
You forgot a word in: "Nick watched through the trees in her backyard which gave him a perfect into her bedroom to see "
And the layout needs a little bit more work. The line breaks seem a little bit random.
If your into this stuff, I'm looking for somebody to review my work. Let me know if your interested.
Keep on writing!
|2012-07-14 14:45:17||Entrapped, Enslaved. Chapters 1-4||Thanks for the compliments!
Yeah, I'll finish. Don't know how long it will take though. I've got a few more things planned :)
|2012-07-14 18:49:55||Entrapped, Enslaved 11-13||Don't worry. Peter agree's. He'll take care of it in the next chapter ;)
Glad you enjoyed the rest!
|2012-07-15 18:31:37||Enslaved, Entrapped 14-16||I'll do my best to write some more as soon as possible. It's a little busy at the moment.
@Charmbrights, Don't worry, I wouldn't copy suggestions word for word. I might not use them at all. But I'm curious as to what other people would like to see happening. That's all :)
Thanks for commenting and/or reading!
|2012-07-17 12:33:58||Catherine 1||I liked it, more please!|