Comments from PenKnave193

Date Story title Comment
2013-01-05 19:47:42 My SEXY Cousin Totally unreadable, so I have no comment on the content. In the future please do not use all-caps, and learn to use paragraph breaks. Those two things would at least allow me to read this.
2013-01-27 09:30:11 Pool Party Positive rating. Way too quick to the sex, more lead up would have made this more enjoyable for me. The guy in the story is an insensitive a-hole, but most horny teenagers are, so no points off for that.
2013-07-06 10:10:57 My first time with my older sister. A nice, if quick, story. Personally, I would have liked it a bit longer. Keep up the good work.
2013-09-23 13:41:48 "MOM GETS HORNY IN THE WOODS" On the whole not a bad story.

The problems that I had was the constant shifting between different points of view. This became confusing after awhile. The second problem was that it became repetitive. There was no change is style between the different characters.

Keep writing!