Comments from DRDAVE
|2009-02-01 00:53:12||Amy's Second Attack||So this will be unusual here. I'm writing the 3rd part and it's mostly done. I'm needing a set of eyes to look at it, and suggest pieces for the end of the chapter. I would prefer them to be female as it was an audience I was trying to write to.
What I'm playing to is the largest sex organ a human has. The one between the ears. There's a lot in my stories that are not told intentionally. I also try to have an ebb and flow.
The sequencing also needs to make sense to me. Opening a door and finding a sexy girl on the other side, invite her into the house and then doing her is very contrived and not exciting at all.
So who's up to helping me out? Please leave me a comment if you would like to read what I have now.