Comments from jdm320

Date Story title Comment
2013-09-25 11:25:14 Little Ben And The Lady Doctor - Part - 1 (Revised & Elaborate Version) Very erotic beginning. I like the angle and the innocence of the story. Loved the woman's point of view.
2013-10-01 11:15:34 A Day in the Life of a Biker Gang The story was too choppy. May need to try a simpler story line.
2013-10-01 11:29:09 A secret brother and sisters secret romance Story was not bad. The writing needs work and some structure. Just because it is erotica doesn't mean you can just put words together and be done. Read some of the higher percentage stories and see how they make the story real. Don't get discouraged.
2013-10-01 15:35:36 Kristina Is Plugged By he Tire Repairman Very erotic. Details were great. Nothing like a horny red head.
2013-10-02 14:34:00 Whoring Around Hogwarts Good start. Please continue.