Comments from jdm320

Date Story title Comment
2013-11-18 12:58:50 the start of some great fun ( Pt 1 ) The story was choppy. Try using quotation marks to being the conversation out. Check spelling too.
2013-11-18 15:16:28 sisters boyfriend Bad grammar, bad punctuation, all ads up to bad story.
2013-11-19 13:17:04 Me and my English teacher Unfortunately your writing style is not that good.
2013-11-19 13:55:46 Mom's Medication Very hot story. I will be looking for part 2
2013-11-19 15:11:45 Stepsister Molly Cums Home - Part 1 Nothing to say that's not already been said. Good job