| 2008-03-28 17:07:19 |
Kyles Revenge
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holy crap u suck |
| 2007-01-24 12:33:54 |
mother wanted me
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not very long, and lacks a lot... |
| 2007-01-24 15:16:30 |
mother wanted me
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What a dumb-ass story. It sucked big-time. Not only that, you spell worse than my 6-year-old nephew. Terrible. Lord, do you need to go back to school and learn more about proper grammar and spelling. |
| 2007-01-24 17:07:13 |
mother wanted me
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Get an editor or a friend to read your stories and clean them up. Way to many errors in grammar and word usage to be enjoyable to read. The content seemed interesting and could make a nice story. Keep writing and work to improve your command of English. Good luck. |
| 2007-01-24 19:08:57 |
mother wanted me
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great potential-tell me more about your 2 weeks with her.7/10 |