| 2007-01-25 04:52:46 |
mother wanted me
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Yes, this is a major league suck-ass story. It sucked, sucked, sucked. Go get a job where you don't need to speak or write in English --- like in Mexico or El Salvador. Man, this was sooooooooo awful. |
| 2007-01-25 06:31:45 |
mother wanted me
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No good spelling. Total disorder, weak description |
| 2007-01-25 15:35:42 |
mother wanted me
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bullshit story:and being written by a illiterate doesn't help either |
| 2007-01-26 02:57:38 |
mother wanted me
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Rushed with the story too much. Slow down, be more descriptive. Potential for a real horny story. |
| 2007-01-26 05:27:30 |
mother wanted me
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Learn how to write proper english before you try writing porn stories. This wasn't very good. |