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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-05-20 07:49:42 | The pros and cons of breathing | I think you need something to indicate the transition between the auction, the sex and the end because without it it can get confusing. Overall I liked the story but it needs to be longer. |
| 2007-05-21 06:14:12 | The pros and cons of breathing | Awful, awful, awful. |
| 2007-05-23 21:01:50 | The pros and cons of breathing | im sorry that some of you dislike it..but maybe you need to try writing insteadof just reading..exactly so untill you write a story that everyone loves dont critqiue me i take constructive critism not your bull **** |
| 2007-05-25 03:52:01 | The pros and cons of breathing | Not into gay or rape, but it is a nice concept and pretty well written. Like said before, a transition or just a line break (------) between the shifts of scenes would be helpful. Also, don't write for length as another has suggested, write for detail and story. You have a good story, just work with the detail. Also, as a writer, reader feedback is very important, good and bad. Sifting only through the good and ignoring that bad will isolate you from your readers. Ignore the extreme reviews and work with the constructive ones and you'll vastly improve on your skills. |
| 2007-05-31 21:11:00 | The pros and cons of breathing | oh thanks for the comment i'll work on that |