| 2007-05-10 17:35:39 |
The Key Party
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Nice and short story. I gave it a 9. |
| 2007-05-10 20:14:47 |
The Limo Driver Part 1
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This needs WAY more detail when it comes to the fucking scenes. I mean you have a lot of good detail with the "plot" and everything, but when you get down to the actual fucking and stuff, no detail u just say that they did it. Otherwise it was a good/hot story. |
| 2007-05-11 10:43:23 |
The Limo Driver Part 1
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A lot more actual fuck facts needed, |
| 2007-05-16 01:21:00 |
The Limo Driver Part 1
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Great Story details are good but they can get to "wordy" also overall I would give it a 9 |
| 2008-01-06 17:28:26 |
The Limo Driver Part 1
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No Balls, You want to leave comments, let us know who you are, sign in before leaving your comments so we can see if you can do any better or if your just jealous. I believe that this person is trying and has a good insight for writing stories. Lets tell him and others whats wrong and what needs to be fix. Not put people down and leave bad comments. |