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My girlfriend, a hotel room, myself and no interruptions.
I met Katie when we were sophomores in high school. She was a hot, little brunette who played field hockey and softball, so she was in great shape. At 5'6” and around 115 pounds, she would make all the guys and some girls in the school, drool when she walked by them. Her ponytail, swaying on her head, tight little ass and well developed breasts completed the package. I was a six foot, 225 pound football and baseball player, so I was in great shape as well. Since I had been boxing since I was in grade school. I had well defined muscles and abs. The girls looked at me with lust in their eyes and the guys wanted to be my friend. I talked to most everyone cordially and,with the exception of sports, did not really interact with anyone.

Katie and I began dating in March, shortly into spring sport season. Seeing her outside of school was difficult at first, but once I had my car it became easy as pie. We went to the beach several times that summer. Seeing her in a bikini drove me crazy and I could not hide the massive erection I got whenever I saw her in the waves or laying on the sand. Her well developed 36C breasts barley restrained by her top and the bottoms that looked like they were too small was almost more then I could tolerate. I would wear a wet-suit because I was learning to surf and it was not very easy to hide anything while wearing it. My muscles, my ass and my raging hard on, were all there for Katie to see. She was with me when I bought it and really liked the fit. “You know that wet-suit is so tight and fitting on you, I know all your secrets.” She would graze against my crotch with her hand and rub her butt against me. I would place my arms around her waist and move down toward her hips. She would take deep breaths in and exhale a slight moan, making my hard on strain against the neoprene material. I could smell her becoming aroused and slide my hand down the front of her bikini. It was wet and she had not been in the ocean all day. “Do you like that?” She was so wet and her smell was intoxicating. “You make me so wet, but we can't do anything right now.” This happened a couple of times on the beach. Whenever we were at each others houses, we would repeat this game with our shorts and shirts on and I always got my hands close to her slit. She would stop me just short of my objective and say, “We can't do anything right now.”

I finally had enough of dancing around the subject of us getting physical with our relationship. I realize that we were both virgins, but this was getting to much to handle. My balls were becoming blue and I did not even know what that was at the time. She would have to rise out her panties. Once, I was us driving home, she reached over to my leg and slid her hand onto my lap, massaging my cock until it became erect. Still, that is as far as it would go. What a tease!

We were sitting in her parent's living room, no one else was home, and I asked the question that had been on my mind. “I want to make love to you so bad, I can't stand it. When are we going to stop playing around and do this?” She glanced at me and I could see her pondering the question closely. “JP, know I'm a virgin and playing games is one thing, but I'm nervous about actual intercourse?” I said in a soft voice, half trembling myself, “Look we have been with each other for quite some time and I know you care for me, right?” “Yes, of course I do and you know it,” she remarked. I knew that her playing games was all part of the fun for her, but she also knew that she had gone too far on many occasions. “I say we make a night of it, no rushing around, no looking over our shoulder, just you and me.” “What about expectations?” she asked. “What if I do feel like the mood is right or what if..?” I cut her off mid sentence, “No expectations needed, it's hard to have any when you've never did anything” I gave her a smile and placed my hand on her leg, slowly caressing it. She agreed to the proposition and we began to make plans to get a hotel room and spend the night together without any distractions or interruptions.

Since neither one of us knew what we were doing in the bedroom, we decided to do some research to ensure that it didn't turn into a tragedy instead of a wonderful experience. I found out later her preparation was drastically different from mine. She bought a book, “The Joy of Sex”, if memory serves me correctly. In it, she found some chapters on oral sex, vaginal sex, role playing and a host of other topics. Katie read the chapter on anal sex and was totally against even the idea of trying it at any time. When she told me that, I could not help laughing. My preparation was “borrowing” some X-rated movies from my friend's parents. Now that was an education in itself! I watched girls giving guys blowjobs, guys face diving into a girl's pussy and then actual penetration in various positions. If Katie was getting educated with reference material, I was getting educated with demonstrations and visual aids. One of the films was an instructional type video. I actually learned how to “eat a girl out” and how to enter a vagina three different ways and positions. I thought I was a seasoned pro by watching the film. I was ready to perform and take Katie for the ride of her life.

After a month of school activities and various other commitments, the day finally availed itself to us. One of my friend's brothers worked an upscale hotel on the beach and got us a room for next to nothing. We checked into the hotel and proceeded up to the room. I had just came from a baseball tournament and was needing a shower. Katie entered the room first and I followed closely behind, placing the DO NOT DISTURB on the handle and locking the door. Katie placed her stuff on one of the beds, I did not know there would be two, and proceeded to sit down on the other bed. I dropped my bag in the floor next to the same bed as her's and walked into the bathroom. It had a huge shower and no tub. The doors were completely clear and had brass frames holding them. I walked back into the room and invited Katie in the see the shower. “You can see completely the walls on the other side.” she said. “How cool is that and it's huge in there” I remarked. We went back into the room and I said that I was getting a shower, because the uniform was filthy as so was I. “Do you need anything before I get in the shower?” Katie nodded her head no and looked up at me with a puzzling look on her face. “Come sit next to me for a minute, would you.” her voice low and unsure. I sat down next to her, our legs touching, placed my hand on her thigh and inquired “What's up?” She began to tell me that she was not nervous at all until we got into the room and then she got butterflies in her stomach. “I really want you in the worst way, so many times I've wanted to tear your clothes off and have at you.” She further went on to say that she had dreams about this and woke up several times with wet panties and pounding heart. I explained that she had been the subject of many a dream and masturbation sequences at my house. “Really?” “You have actually jerked off to the thought of us having sex?” I explained that I released many a cum shot in her name in the last couple months. Her blushing face told me that she had not expected that and seems somewhat intrigued. “Oh, like you have not done the same thing in your room or shower” I said. Once again, her face told the story. I was on to her fantasy of me. “I'm hitting the shower, don't go anywhere.” Little did she realize I had no intention of putting any clothes on after the shower. As it turned out, she had no intention of being clothed either.

I stripped off my uniform, dropped it in the floor outside the bathroom, left the door ajar and proceeded into the shower. The water heated up fast and I was under the stream of water in a flash. I spun around a couple times, rising the dirt and sweat off. I turned toward the front of the shower and began washing my hair, my back to the door of the bathroom and shower. I had almost finished rinsing my head off, when I felt some hands on my shoulders and then down to my waist. The hands slowly crept around to my abs and began massing them vertically. I knew these hands and was shocked that she was in the shower with me. I had always joked with Katie that I was going to jump in with her one day, so I guess turnabout is fair play. She rested her head on my back, continued to stroke my abs and coming dangerously close to rubbing my increasing erection. “I love the way your abs feel with the water running over them.” she said in a hushed voice. I was unsure when I should turn around to show her my raging hard-on that was now ever present. That question answered itself when she slid around me on the left and placed her tight ass on the outside of my thigh. I could almost make out the front of her through the reflection in the glass. She continued to slid around me, stepped in front and into the stream of water. Katie's hair came down to the middle of her shoulder blades and was wet in a flash, once she stroked it backwards towards me. Being over 6 feet tall and her mid 5 feet, I could see her unrestrained breasts and perky nipples. My erection got harder and began to beat in time with my heart. I guided my hands under her arms and around to encompass her C cups in my palms. She let out a slight moan and pushed back on me, noticing the firm member now in the small of her back. “Turn around, I want to see all of you” I said with a soft, but demanding voice. She complied and now we were facing each other with no secrets to hide. I looked down at her wet, glistening body and placed my hands on her waist. Before I looked any further, I kissed her on the forehead and then the lips. She stood on the tips of her toes, her arms encircled my neck and her left hand on the back of my head. I began sliding my tongue in and out of her mouth, sucking on her tongue a few times to try something new from the videos I had watched. Her response was insane, she was began moaning and really getting into it. Katie began to suck on my tongue, mimicking my move. Her mouth was tight on my tongue and, as if by instinct, she reached reached down with her right hand and grabbed my manhood. Upon feeling the full erection in her hand, she sucked my tongue a little harder, almost biting it.

Katie had never seen a penis before, not to mention held a erect one in her hands. She pushed me toward the back of the shower with her left hand and examined my rock hard shaft more closely. As she pushed me back, my head and eyes moved down to her womanhood to reveal my eventual prize for the night. Katie had a thin strip of pubic hair that began just above her crease and proceeded up 2 or 3 inches. I watched as the water bounced of her well toned and tanned body. It ran down her front, snaking around her breast, down her torso and dripping from her slit. What a sight! If I was not hard prior to this, I certainly was now. She gazed at my fully erect, slightly longer than 8 inch member and began to stroke it up and down just below the head. “I did not expect it to be this size!” she said in an almost muted voice. Then, without missing a beat, she placed her left hand below her right and began using both hands simultaneously, stroking the length of my shaft. “Do you like this?”, she said while massaging up and down the shaft. I nodded my head, unable to voice my pleasure at the time. She began a slight twisting motion, alternating her hand's direction, as she continued to slid up and down

my throbbing member. “It feels a little strange, soft head and hard shaft.” she said with a puzzled voice. “I can feel your heartbeat thru it, just throbbing away.” The rhythm she was using of going up and down my shaft began to quicken. I placed my hands on her shoulders and exhaled a deep breath. She seemed to be going for a quick ending with the hand-job. “Stop, Stop, Stop!” I said, looking down in her eyes and then to my manhood being held firm in her grasp. “I don't want to end this soon and you're getting me close.” She paused her motion with her left hand thumb under the head of my penis. She had read that one of the most sensitive spots on a male's body was the frenulum. She began rubbing it in a circular motion and applying gentle pressure. Again, I was coming close to exploding all over her hands and stomach. I placed my hands on hers and said in a soft voice, “I think the shower is done, we need to take this to the bed.” Katie agreed quickly and we headed to the bed, barely grabbing towels as we went.

I led Katie to the bed and sat her down in the middle. I pulled out two pillows, leaving one in place on the headboard. “Stand up, let me get that towel from you.”, I said with a soft voice. Throwing the towel behind onto the other bed, I knelt down in front of her and began kissing her right thigh, just above the knee. Working slowly toward her womanhood, I inhaled the scent like a mouse does to cheese. I progressed to just short of touching her strip of hair and jumped to the other thigh. Katie let out a slight moan and began caressing the top of my head. Once again by her knees, I stood up, grab her by her waist and escorted her to the pillow on the headboard. “Lie down, with your head on the pillow.” She complied readily with a smile forming on her face. “What are you going to do to me?”, she inquired. I said nothing, placed my knees on the bed, crept up over her legs and straddled them. Lowering myself to her belly button, I licked my way up her body, stopping momentarily at her breasts. A few blows of cool air from my mouth and her nipples were pointing to the ceiling. Continuing up to her neck, I began to tickle her ears, lick under her chin to neck and back to her breasts. Her breathing increased and her moaning became a little louder. I now concentrated on her breasts, pink areolas and erect nipples. I took each of them in my mouth, massaging the nipple with my tongue and sucking on them as I drew them in and out. Katie's moans were getting louder and she began saying, “Yes, Oh my God, Yes!” I definitely was getting her worked up. Tracing my way back down her torso, I was now at her landing strip of hair. Using the bottom of my tongue, I continued down until I was, at last, staring directly at her slit. The smell was intoxicating and glistened in the ambient light of the room.

I grasped the other pillow and brought it towards us. “Lift your butt, so I can put this underneath you.” I said as she complied immediately. I placed her hands, palms up on either side of her head on the pillow. She was now there for my enjoyment and hers as well. Placing my hands on the inside of her knees, I pushed her legs apart. She looked down at me and only could muster to say “Oh my!” with soft voice. Beginning at the top of her split, I blew on her beautiful vulva and still hiding clit. Katie took a deep breath, her legs widened slightly. Using just my lips, I kissed my way down to her inviting, virgin, vagina. It was pink like a rose and wet as a glass of water. I had seen a picture or two of a woman's holy of holies, but this was a much better site. I proceeded to blow a cool breath on it and like magic her legs widened more. Once again, using my tongue, I traced my way back up to her inviting clit. Using my thumbs, I opened her lips and sucked her clit into my mouth. Having watched the video, I knew to be gentle and increase slowly over time. “That feels so good, JP!” Katie exhaled. Her hands began their trip to my head and arrived rather quickly. I continued working my lips and tongue on her clit and drew her lips into my mouth, prompting another reaction from her. Katie began to press her hips toward my mouth and circle a little. I knew this was a good sign and proceeded down to her waiting vagina. Her vagina was so wet that could have stopped my kissing, licking and sucking, and just went for my overall goal. Reminding myself of making it a memorable experience, I pursued her vagina with my tongue. I placed my hands, palms up under each butt cheek and parted her womanhood with my thumbs. Laying on my stomach, I could see all the way up to Katie's eyes, which were looking at me and waiting for the next move. Pointing my tongue, I went straight into her pretty, pink hole and curved my tongue up as I entered her. She let out a gasp of enjoyment and I was on it like a hungry wolf. The video taught me quite of few techniques; licking, sucking, blowing, and moving my lips and head around. About five minutes of all these things going on between her legs, Katie's hips began to move up and down in a circular manner. “Oh my god, that feels so good!” she must have said twenty or thirty times. Then something unexpected happened, her vagina and butt hole started convulsing in time with each other. I could feel it on my chin and tongue, so I picked up the pace. “YES! YES! YES!, HOLY CRAP! OH MY GOD, JP! OH MY GOD! AAAAAGGGGHHH!” Katie screamed while digging her nails into my head and wrapping her legs around my back. I knew what that meant. She was having her first orgasm and telling the entire hotel floor about it. I stopped all my motions, waited to be released from her leg hold and looked up at her. She was breathing hard and biting her lip. “Did you enjoy that?” I said, already knowing the answer. “Where did you learn to do that?” she asked, still trying to catch her breath. “How long have you known how to do that?” I just smiled and said “That's a secret.” She motioned for me to come up to her and kissed me, tasting her own juices. “Well, looks like it's my turn.”, a sheepish grin forming on her face. “That's not necessary.” I said, half hoping she did not believe me. “Oh, I think it is or at least I'll try.” Katie was not taking no for an answer. “I want to suck your dick so bad right now and you're going to let me.” All I could say was “Well, alright then.”

Katie sat up and began kissing my chest. She kissed, sucked and playfully bit my nipples. She rolled off the pillow underneath her and told me to assume the same position as she did. I complied, resting my head on the pillow, but threw the other pillow elsewhere on the bed. Katie began kissing me , biting my lip and sucking on my tongue. She worked her way down my neck and to my chest. Playfully, she bit both of my nipples and licked them occasionally. Making her way down my torso, she rub my abs with her hands as she kissed each muscle. Having arrived at my fully engorged and throbbing shaft, she gently kissed the tip. She pushed my legs apart with her elbows and remained on all fours. Katie exclaimed, “JP, you don't have hardly any hair down here!” Just in case of this moment, I did not want her to get hair in her mouth. Grasping my member in her right hand, she placed it sideways in her mouth. Katie began brushing the underside of it with her tongue going side to side. She made her way all the way down to my tightened scrotum, stopping at the end of the shaft. She then, placing my rock hard shaft in her left hand, proceeded to switch to the top and proceed back to the tip, kissing and licking her way. Once she again arrived at the head, she payed extra attention to the frenulum again. “You have a beautiful cock. I love the way it feels in my mouth.” Not wanting or willing to waste time, she encircled my manhood with both hands holding the shaft and lowered her head down. Opening her mouth slightly, she guided the head into her mouth, making a slurping sound as it entered. Her eyes opened slightly wider, now realizing that it was not going to fit unless she opened wider. She now had the head of my raging hard-on in her mouth and slowly lowered her head more in an attempt to take more in. She popped it out of her mouth, shook it a little and said, “I pretty sure I can't get it all, but I'll get as much as I can.” She laughed a little and placed it back in her mouth. Katie began circling her tongue around the head and pressing on the frenulum several times. She now centered her head directly over my cock, took in a deep breath thru her nose and crammed as much of in her mouth as see could. She took about four inches of it, came back up, went back down until she was gagging. Every time she came up, she licked the frenulum and circled around the head. She used her right hand to hold the base and her left hand stayed next to her mouth, holding the head as she circled. Katie paused once or twice, I can't remember, and said, “I really like your cock.” Her paced quickened after about three minutes, her mouth and hands beginning to tighten their grip. “OH MY GOD YOU MOUTH IS SO GOOD!” I exclaimed on more than one occasion. While she was working her mojo on my member, I reached down, pulled her hair into a make shift ponytail, wrapped it thru my fingers and observed her without hair in the way. She continued her pace and then started using her left thumb to press in and circle around the frenulum, a tip she picked up in the book. I could feel my scrotum tightening and my eventual ball draining orgasm approaching rapidly. “I'M GOING TO CUM, I'M GOING TO CUM.”

I was giving her fair warning because I did not know how much longer I could hold out. Katie could taste the pre-cum in her mouth and knew I was close, another tip from the book. She continued her pace and movements without even missing a beat. I pulled her mouth off of my cock right as my load released, “HOLY SHIT, I'M CUMMING...........KATIE!!!” Katie held my pulsating cock in her hand and watched as stream after stream on semen flew out of the tip. She continued to stroke the shaft with her right hand and used her left thumb the frenulum and watching in amazement as ribbons of cum propelled themselves into the air and onto the bed. After two or three spurts, she placed the head back in her mouth, placed her tongue flat on the frenulum and sucked on it more. She got a stream in her mouth and let in run down the side of her mouth. Katie was not going to swallow it, this time. As my orgasm subsided, Katie looked up at me and said “That was intense, I did not know guys had that much cum in them.” “Give me a few minutes and I'll have some more of it.” I explained. “REALLY!?” she said with look of wonderment and excitation. “You better believe it sweetie, We've just begun this little adventure.” Katie did not realize that I planned on emptying every once of semen I had in my balls into her or in her presence. She laid her head on my stomach, gently stroking my now flaccid member and said, “Let me know when you're ready.” “Don't worry princess, I will,” I said as we laid on the bed and held one another.

As we laid there, my mind wandered to the video and some of the positions I had witnessed. I knew that we were going to the conventional missionary position, but wondered which other one we could experience. I knew that, being athletes, we had stamina on our side and could experiment with a couple positions. Katie looked up at me and said “ What are you thinking about?” I glanced down at her and shrugged my shoulders saying only, “Nothing much.” I could feel my member begin to respond again, sat up and escorted Katie back onto the pillows once again. “Are you going to use your tongue on me again?” she said with a excited voice and wide smile. Reaching on the nightstand, I grabbed a condom and placed by her hips. I said nothing, began kissing her belly button and slowly worked my way down to her tight, little box. “JP, Oh God, Are you going to do that to me again?!” I again said nothing until my mouth was directly on her vulva and beginning to part her lips with my thumbs and tongue. “Almost, this is to get us both ready.” I continued to lick, suck and play with the folds of her vulva, clit and vagina. “YESSSS, RIGHT THERE, OH MY GOD JP.” Katie began to warm up very quickly. Once I knew she was wet enough for penetration, I grabbed the condom and began to open it. “You don't need that, I'm on the pill.” “Really?, You don't want me to use one?, Not even for our first time?' She looked at me and shaking her head no. “I don't want to take the chance of you getting pregnant, even by mistake.” Katie once again shaking her head said, “ I read the book and know that if we have not been with anyone and I'm on the pill, the chances of any risks are almost none.” My member began to throb at her statement and I could only say “OK.”

I placed myself, on my knees, in between her open legs and began to apply some spit to the head of my erect, throbbing shaft. Grabbing it just behind the head, I lowered myself to the entrance of her vagina. “If it gets to be too much, we'll stop,” I said looking into her eyes. She nodded and took a couple deep breaths. “I think I'm ready for this,” she said in a hushed voice. “I'm a little scared about the pain and your size, but I'll be okay.” Now, with the head making direct contact with her vagina, I slow began to slid into her. There was a little resistance, but not as much as I thought. I had read somewhere that if a girl played sports or was extremely active, the vagina is not as tight as other girls. This seemed to be the case and there was a slight “pop” when my head was fully engulfed in her box. Katie took a sharp breath in, moaned slightly and said “Easy, big guy, Easy.” I stopped my forward momentum and checked on her, “You OK?” She nodded, placed her hands on my hips and took another breath in. She pulled me a little toward her and opened her legs slightly. I took this as a sign to progress and did so without hesitation. I placed my hands on either side of her head, lowered my hips a little, took in a breath and proceeded. Katie's eyes were closed and her breathing was deep as I sunk another three or four inches into her. Her, now semi-explored, vagina was so tight and wet. It felt like I was putting my pecker in a lubed up vacuum hose. Her vaginal muscles flexing and relaxing as I entered her more and more. Stopping once again, I checked on her, “Are you still ok?” She nodded, looked up at me and said, “ Is it all in?” I was not sure how to respond immediately, seeing at least 2 inches were still waiting to be inserted. “Almost there,” I said. Katie opened her eyes fully, looked down her torso and saw that I had not fully penetrated her with my manhood. Taking a huge, deep breath, Katie grabbed my ass cheeks, flexed her hips toward me and inserted the rest of me in one big move. “OH MY GOD, JP!!!” I was now fully inside her and could once again feel resistance against the head, I remembered later it was her cervix that I had encountered. I slowly withdrew my penis, stopping just before the head exited. Once again, I gave her the full measure of my manhood until I hit the bottom. “OH GOD, THAT FEELS GOOD!” she exclaimed. “YOU ARE SO TIGHT AND WET,” I said as I continued my in and out motions. Her vagina was squeezing and relaxing, almost in time with my movements. Katie brought her legs up and encircled my hips, digging her heels into my lower back. “DON'T STOP, DON'T STOP, KEEP GOING, KEEP GOING.” she said over and over again. I felt the muscles in her vagina start to pulsate around my penis, slow at first and then faster and faster. “HOLY SHIT, OH MY GOD, JP, JP, JP” she began to scream in my ear. Her vaginal muscles now pulsating uncontrollably, I slowed my pace, not wanting to cum to quick. “ AAAAAGGGGHHH, HOLY SHIT, JP!!!” I stopped and let her vagina pulsate around my cock, biting my lip in hopes I did not bust a nut. It worked, luckily, with Katie writhing under me, her hips hopping of the pillow toward me. Not wanting to lose any time, I said to her “Here switch over, let me be on bottom.” She looked at me, quickly nodded and we flipped around. “What do I do.” she said, gasping for air. “Just get on top, put yourself over my cock and lower onto it.” I said, breathing heavily myself. Katie straddled me in an instant, grab the shaft of my manhood and slid onto it in a blink of an eye. My penis disappeared inside her as she sat down, not even pausing for adjust to the size. “Now, what?” she said with a half smile. “Oh, I think you know what to do.” I said playing her game. With that, she placed both hands on my chest, both soles of her feet on the bed next to my hips and began going up and down on the shaft. I could hear the sound my cock and her wet pussy were making together as she slammed down on it repeatedly. Her breathing was fast and she was moaning more and more with each stroke. My breathing increased and I could not help exclaiming, “OH MY GOD KATIE, THAT FEELS SO DAMN GOOD.” Katie continued to impale herself on me and I could feel her pussy start to pulsate again with her thrusting. “YES, YES, YES.” rang out from her mouth. “HOLY SHIT KATIE, YOU'RE GOING TO MAKE ME CUM.” She looked down at me with an instinctual hunger, dug her nails in my chest and began gyrating her hips around, quickening the pace. I grabbed her hips and warned her again that I was extremely close to orgasm. “GET OFF ME OR I'M GOING TO CUM IN YOU.” Still looking into my eyes she said something I did not expect, “ I'M NOT GETTING OFF YOU, IT FEELS SO DAMN GOOD.” I grabbed her by the hips and arched my back, slamming my cock deep inside her. “I'M CUMMING.” Hearing that she gyrated faster on my cock and said, “CUM IN ME, CUM IN ME, I WANT TO FEEL IT INSIDE ME!!”. Her pussy began pulsating uncontrollably, making me shoot my load. Although I could not see it, I could feel ropes of cum slamming into her cervix as her muscles were strangling my member in rhythmic pulses. I had never heard Katie curse off the sports field, so I was taken aback when I heard, “ I'M FUCKING CUMMING!, I'M FUCKING CUMMING!, JP YOU'RE MAKING ME FUCKING CUM AGAIN.” She slammed her breasts down onto my chest as both reached an orgasm.

After the sensations of utter sexual ecstasy left us, we decided to shower again. Katie looked at me with water running down her body and said “ That was incredible, we are so doing that again and again!” I looked at her and said” Well, you are going to have to twist my arm to get me to agree to that.” She looked me with bewilderment and said “Um, What?” With a full smile on my face I said, “Don't worry Miss Katie, a baby could twist my arm!”
4 comments

GustavoVzlaReport 

2020-06-19 22:48:01
You have so much potential. . .
Try to read the most rated stories and try to learn their techniques and methods.
I think you can become a great writer. . .

GustavoVzlaReport 

2020-06-19 22:40:14
Excellent first story.

GustavoVzlaReport 

2020-06-19 22:35:45
Good job. good story.
A recommendation: try to separate the text into paragraphs and isolate the dialogues in separate lines.
I will read anything you write in the future . . .

CyprianoReport 

2020-06-17 19:02:23
Well done.

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