| 2017-03-01 21:51:13 |
detention with Mr. Thomas
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so this story was dumb because it was rushed and lazy. the guy goes from even tempered to crazy in like three seconds. It's boring, the build up isn't worth it. |
| 2017-03-01 21:44:18 |
One For a Millionaire
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The last paragraph is a mess, and yeah seriously, slow it down. This isn't a summary of this guy's day, it's a story. detail! |
| 2017-04-09 05:02:32 |
The Neighbour_(2)
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That was amazing. can't wait to see what else you've got! Keep the Authoritarian stories up though, you did amazing. |
| 2017-04-09 18:35:56 |
Maid to Serve_(0)
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What about this was rape? It was consented the whole way through. Watch your labels |
| 2017-04-09 18:15:03 |
Daddy, no.
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this...is a mess. |