| 2011-04-12 08:37:02 |
Sister Tease
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Good story, you need to chnage the "wife" in the 5th para to girlfriend to keep the continuity of your story. Also when does being the boyfriend become an Uncle? |
| 2011-05-22 09:36:51 |
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This was posted in 2009 by Rebecca Lewis. |
| 2011-06-12 08:47:36 |
Defying My Family
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Good start but you should really proof read your stories. The tenses of your sentences should be consistent. Spell check helps also. |
| 2011-07-13 08:35:44 |
Casey_(0)
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Outstanding story. Please learn to use apostrophes. |
| 2011-07-13 08:36:34 |
casey 2
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Outstanding story. Please learn to use apostrophes. |