| 2012-08-22 23:30:55 |
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I hope this is leading somewhere because you've set up a good basis for a story. Positive vote in anticipation of more to follow. |
| 2012-08-22 23:48:43 |
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Yup, You lived up to expectations. Waiting for more. (Callous little bastard ain't he though??) Positive vote |
| 2012-08-23 00:00:21 |
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Still not bad BUT spelling is falling away came has an 'e' on the end and a few others. . . . |
| 2012-08-23 00:04:30 |
im sorry
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Humor and punchline of a joke is pretty much fucked when the writer can't even keep it coherent because of simple grammar and usage of the fucking language. |
| 2012-08-23 00:07:38 |
My Brother Comes Home From The War
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Tried to read this incoherent diatribe, but gave up. If you can't learn to space out (ie paragraphs), I can't be buggered trying to read it. |