| 2012-03-15 12:14:12 |
New Neighbor: Part 3
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Spring break is coming up. Please do part four. Is the empty lot next door for sale? Maybe you might get another new neighbor. I hope you start another story too. Good writer. "A" in English Lit. |
| 2012-03-15 18:10:55 |
The Late Bloomer and The Pilot’s Wife
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Very good story. Obviously no major spelling or grammatical errors. I like the way you developed the character from shy, to willing pupil, to master student of seduction. Just a note. For better reading, break up your spoken parts into separate sentences, like on some of the other sites. I know that sometimes when posting, it does not come out like you printed it. I like the story and the declaration we are all learners, not masters. Hope you write more. Good job. |
| 2012-03-15 18:22:10 |
Glamour
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Very nice. Good story idea too. The interaction between the two women was well presented and exciting to read. Hot!!! Would love to be a photographers assistant and prep a beautiful woman for a photoshoot. Can't wait for her next appointment. |
| 2012-03-15 18:32:17 |
Sex&SexY.x2
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Really? A man with a 12@1/2 inch dick and she has to fake it. I guess the rest of us men do not stand a chance of helping. Sex is still a lot more than just a dick. Thats why women can have sex with another woman and NO dick. Love to read the next part. Her husbands car? Her Fathers? Her Mothers????? |
| 2012-03-16 09:12:59 |
More than best buds 1_(1)
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If tying a paper ball to a baloon and lighting it is a killer party I don't know what you call lame. At least you wrote a story for the first time. Not too bad. Just that Casey walking through a double locked door would freak me out a little. Not to mention getting caught with a dick in your mouth. You left it with a scene that does make you want to know what next? Is she bringing her girlfriend? Keep writing. |