| 2013-12-22 11:17:21 |
Stranded_(0)
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I enjoyed the story and the clever way the option of a part two was offered. |
| 2014-01-01 14:11:33 |
My mom, boyfriend, and me
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I like where this story seems to be going. |
| 2014-01-01 14:23:43 |
Morning sex_(0)
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Found some mistakes in this particular chapter. The "my boyfriend" phrase was really overused in this tale. By the fourth or fifth one I was praying that you would use his name or any other pronoun instead of the" my boyfriend " phrase. If you proofread the story you would probably have came to the same conclusion yourself. All in all the story was good but the grammar could be improved on. |
| 2014-01-09 09:59:20 |
My first Time_(8)
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Good start. Hoping this series will continue. |
| 2015-05-24 13:43:13 |
Home TIme
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I can almost see the action in my minds eye. Good job of storytelling. |