| 2015-06-11 11:47:48 |
My new life: Moving In
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Nice story; let them explore their own hearts and get to know each other. A late bloomer will do this, trust me, and it will be the sweeter for their journey of discovery. Jumping into all sorts of wild sex would make a good stroke story (q.v. BashfulScribe) bit would be completely out of character for your main characters this early in the story. |
| 2015-06-11 12:05:47 |
My New Life 2: The Next Morning
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Doing it right, keep it up! No pun intended... |
| 2015-07-01 08:05:33 |
A New Day, A New You part 13
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Thanks, this must have been a hard one to write. And thanks for getting rid of Gabriel. |
| 2015-08-07 11:41:02 |
Allison 1
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I have just begun reading your new story and I like it; I was a 5th grade Gentile in Bountiful and they persecuted me, every one - even the Catholic, to distract them from him. I'm glad you're still writing; I like your work. I'm not an English professor, but a very well-read Physics teacher. If you like, I would be happy to look over your chapters and flag discrepancies. No significant changes, only spelling and grammar - the potholes that make reading a little rougher. I don't want to give any personal ID here, but if you're so inclined, there must be some way we can get in touch. Hope to hear from you. |
| 2016-05-19 09:13:19 |
A New Day, The Other Me chapter 6
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Another great chapter, worth the wait. Thanks. |