| 2015-04-28 04:20:37 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 16
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Another fine installment. Things are definitely going to be coming to a head. |
| 2015-05-01 23:30:43 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 17
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Another fine installment. |
| 2015-05-02 13:32:32 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 17
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You are neglecting the connections to a family at odds. I believe that help dealing with Carl and Tyrone will come from that connection |
| 2015-07-26 23:30:37 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 35
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Sometimes wrapping up a good story can seem like it's going stale because you don't have the conflict or a visible enemy, but i would rather have a story wrapped up instead of just ending |
| 2015-08-11 10:15:50 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 36
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In the midnight hour she cried more, more,more. Another good part eagerly awaiting next part |