| 2006-07-29 08:03:32 |
The Neighbor Girl and Her Mom
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TRUE STORY? Okay SUPERMAN, I hear Lois calling you, as well as a few interns from Bellvue, but we won't hold that against you for the effort. Very good try. |
| 2006-07-29 19:42:36 |
The Neighbor Girl and Her Mom
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Bullshit on all this cumming. Total bullshit. And the paragraphs are too long. |
| 2006-07-31 01:06:57 |
The Neighbor Girl and Her Mom
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wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! There was so much cum in those scenes that with all that cum u could even water whole africa. i mean cmon wat did she drink, 5 galons of water or something. buh! |
| 2006-08-17 14:39:39 |
The Neighbor Girl and Her Mom
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my mom would rather swallow my cum than a porterhouse staek |
| 2006-09-03 23:43:23 |
The Neighbor Girl and Her Mom
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How did you write this story? I have heard of a long run on paragraph, but you wrote 5,600 words in one paragraph. For a writer that is a very bad idea, as readers have a hard time following the story, and become frustrated when they loose their place. Break it up. |