| 2005-03-19 20:17:39 |
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I agree, not bad. Good story line, believable, good form and punctuation. Go back and read your story again before you publish it next time. Shorten the sentences a little. It's not improper to use contractions. Good work. 9/10 |
| 2005-03-20 23:05:55 |
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That was an excelent piece of writing. Major props to you man. I'll be looking forward to future pieces from you. Untill then, keep up the good work! |
| 2005-03-21 00:28:43 |
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oohhhh tht made me cum so bad! |
| 2005-03-22 08:32:30 |
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still cumming |
| 2005-03-22 11:36:58 |
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An excellent story. The thrill of fucking a daughter without actually doing it! It had me cumming! |