| 2006-08-31 21:29:04 |
me my brother and his friends 2
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loved it. i know this is a year old, I hope your still out there. keep it up. |
| 2007-05-14 15:59:16 |
me my brother and his friends 2
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holy fuck. that was great |
| 2005-04-06 00:44:12 |
my fetishes
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You've got the right ideas. My problem was that there was no real development to the story. No real beginning middle or end. You have talent, it simply needs to be refined. Perhaps, a bit more suspense... More physical contact? Just my thoughts. I've not been published so, what do I know? I know that I am addicted to reading, literature of all sorts. Keep plugging!!!!! 'All good things come from hard work and dedication!' - piercedtwins |
| 2005-04-13 12:30:16 |
my fetishes
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Great Fucking Storie, I loved it I wish I was your boyfriend. Keep up the great work and let me know when you post another story please,thanks.. |
| 2005-04-06 21:08:37 |
Me and My best friend_(4)
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very hot storie, please write more, super first try. |