| 2005-05-02 00:34:11 |
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Please include the komplete Family and some Neighbours, Friends and some Teachers |
| 2005-05-23 04:53:15 |
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we are dasperatyely waiting for second part.......................... |
| 2005-06-07 02:39:56 |
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While a certain degree of grammatical, spelling, and diction error is reasonable and even expected, there comes a point where it detracts from the writing. Your story has a well detailed sequence of events; however, your writing is atrocious. Please study the rules of English grammar and purchase a dictionairy. |
| 2005-12-28 01:28:38 |
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Please get the brother and mum involved |
| 2006-01-04 12:16:29 |
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i fucking loved it. just work on the spelling and grammar and you'll be good to go. it made me wet just reaading it. also, next time include more characters. the mom would be a good twist. |