| 2005-05-16 04:14:37 |
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piss poor. learn this; plot, suspense,conflict, climax, conclusion. there should be an arch for the story as well as the main charachter. anyboody who passed 10th grade should know this... |
| 2005-05-16 07:41:45 |
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um needs more of a plot this is poor. common man 4/10 |
| 2005-05-16 08:39:22 |
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superbe story .no need to spread it out its clear and to the point .i enjoyed it .i hate the long winded stories where the writer psycho analises the story |
| 2005-05-16 17:51:01 |
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great story.. little longer.. like the talkin dirty.. sequel!!! part 2! 10/10 |
| 2005-05-17 16:22:07 |
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Thats fucking disgusting u guys are fucking perferts if u like incest. |