| 2007-01-30 22:04:09 |
A Stormy Night
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It was okay. 7/10 |
| 2005-05-07 22:39:04 |
Stormy Night
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dude, you keep switching between third and first person. If its written from Amy's perspective, dont keep saying I. It gets really confusing |
| 2005-05-07 23:32:04 |
Stormy Night
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yeah it gets really confusing just do it in 1st next time |
| 2005-05-08 11:36:33 |
Stormy Night
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good start. just keep the people straight. if you're amy, and you're telling the story, say "i". |
| 2005-05-08 12:04:48 |
Stormy Night
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have you tried checking your grammar? it seriously sucks. it's a good story when you dig through the errors but there are so many, it's hard to do. |