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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-12-11 13:34:44 | Cold Meat 2: Slippery When Wet | Man dead guys get hotter ass than I do... |
| 2005-06-25 23:16:41 | Randy's Birthday~part 2 | Has potential, but needs work. A story is much easier to read if it is broken up into paragraphs. Each line of dialogue should start its own paragraph. Chatspeak, i.e. LOL, never belongs in a narrative. One exclamation point is always enough. Other than that, the story was a great quickie. |
| 2005-07-01 04:17:05 | Randy's Birthday~part 2 | great start but remember voyeurism |
| 2005-06-15 11:20:39 | Kelly's Bad Day at the Office | nice that that bad |
| 2005-06-15 15:24:02 | Kelly's Bad Day at the Office | Needs some editing but its prett well written. Could use some code clarification, this was very NC, |