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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2005-07-12 02:27:04 | Don`t look behind you. | yeah my same sentiments exactly^ |
| 2005-07-13 09:10:41 | Don`t look behind you. | this is the most fucked-up story i have ever read in my whole entire life. |
| 2005-07-13 13:54:00 | Don`t look behind you. | Hmmmmmmmmm! |
| 2005-07-13 18:05:12 | Don`t look behind you. | A bit too rushed, but the story line has potential. "Show" don't "tell" is the advice given in creative writing classes. Tell us more, develop characters, appeal to all senses, emotions, etc. And despite the "sick" story-line, write a piece that arouses and incites the lust you felt on fantasizing it. If you can achieve all that, you'll be getting top ratings and no more "Huh?" comments. I'll give it a 5 for creative plot, but the story, I'm afraid, wasn't well-told. Keep writing and have fun! |
| 2005-10-14 19:59:23 | Don`t look behind you. | hahaha i liked it |