| 2007-03-19 22:55:54 |
Submit to My Dog
|
coulda been better... |
| 2005-08-06 06:58:58 |
My sixteenth year
|
Nice job, well writen. How about the lady teaches him to get really nasty? |
| 2005-08-07 05:03:00 |
My sixteenth year
|
Break for a cigarette at a publick place that is 2/3rds full, and this is a month before your 16th b-day. Please try and think more into your story. |
| 2005-08-07 21:54:49 |
My sixteenth year
|
Although it was true story more detail would mkae it better. Also the tangent story about his first time. although good, was distracting. Overall a good story. 8/10 |
| 2005-08-08 15:11:05 |
My sixteenth year
|
good story 7/10 |