| 2005-09-02 09:50:33 |
Lacy and the Poker Game
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Wow, you have renewed my faith in this site. That was fantastic. You have a good handle on the dialogue and structure. Two suggestions, I have found the best way to write a story for this site is to copy and paste from word, that way you keep all of the paragraph formatting. Second, if you are planning on writing a group sex scene, it helps if you give the charectors more distinct names or appearences, otherwise all the Toms, Dicks, and Harrys sorta run together. I might have had Lee join in during the festivities and added a little oral, but thats just me. KEEP WRITING! |