| 2005-09-09 00:33:23 |
young ladies get educated pt.1
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yeah umm it looks like you have a 5th grade english grammar concept.... sex stories are much better when u can understand wat is happening o0o0o |
| 2005-09-10 05:04:02 |
young ladies get educated pt.1
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that was some kick ass story! cant wait till part 2 cums out |
| 2005-09-12 07:28:39 |
young ladies get educated pt.1
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dat was great. in da next part i'd like sum anal action with no guys. |
| 2005-09-12 14:28:50 |
young ladies get educated pt.1
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That was a good story but you really need to learn english better, or even jsut using spell check would make it at least twice as good, |
| 2005-09-12 16:59:15 |
young ladies get educated pt.1
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English isn't your first language, is it? That was just excruciatingly bad. I had to force my way through it just so I could be fair. The grammar was almost unreadable. The vocabulary was terrible; loudlessly and plannings are not words in English. Even if the mechanics were good, the story would still be terrible. Plot elements like the bag of drugs plans for sexual slavery are mentioned in the beginning and then (thankfully) not brought up in the rest of the story. If, as the introduction states, this teacher hates everything about the girls but their hot bodies, there would not be a relationship that would allow the immediate discussion of anything sexual. That is called characterization, and even a jerk-off story needs it. I hope part II comes in about a year or so. |