| 2005-09-12 11:37:27 |
My Sexy Officemate
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Damn it, this outsourcing shit has gone too far. Now all of XNXX writers are going to be replaced be foreign writers being translated by babblefish. We need to call our congressmen! Actually, not too bad. You dwelled on the minutiae a little too much. The story can develope slowley if something is hapening, but don't leave the reader hanging in dead air for so long. Also, keep in mind that your audiance is primarily US and UK readers, so you will have to adjust your language accordingly. Read more of the stories from this site and get a grasp of the nuances of the language. Keep writing. |