| 2005-09-13 11:01:05 |
In a Family of Four
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Crapola. When the cliche train pulled into town you must have been driving (laying down in front of the TV, not again). It read like a mix tape of other peoples bad stories. Not to mention that it was chock full of holes and inconsistancies. From the first floor and stairs burning down but the firemen were able to go up and get their clothes; to just how many times did he take off his underwear in his moms bed. Double space between paragraphs. You need an anatomy lesson, her clit on your balls from behind but you were not in her. A hard on got you woosey even without 'adult thickness'. The protracted set-up did little for the story. Now, I will give you credit, you did a good job of describing the charecters, the sex was 'enthusiastic', and you obviously tried hard. keep trying |
| 2005-09-13 19:28:03 |
In a Family of Four
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Archaic is a fucking dumbass |
| 2005-09-14 11:46:36 |
In a Family of Four
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you fucking dumbass a 13 yr old doesn't have a 7 1/2 inch cock, even a bloody 15-16 yr old doesnt have 1 (well 16 yr old might if he is lucky) and dude read through your story make sure makes sence you twat. Like you said he was woke up in his mums bed with his boxers off, then later on he takes them off what the fuck! |
| 2005-09-14 22:14:33 |
In a Family of Four
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cumslut mom like i will fuckin believe that... plz bitch... |
| 2005-09-15 12:21:30 |
In a Family of Four
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god good i loved it ! oh god i wish my sis would fuck me for once lol u r very good at it plz make more plz !!!! |